Recount writing:At the beach.

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At the beach 
On Friday after school me and my family went to the beach in Paihia. When we got to Paihia we went to the beach for a swim. First when we got in to the beach me and my sister had a race to the water. I won then my Mum and Dad came in to the water. We stayed in there for 6 minutes. Me and my sister had a race to my dad and I won. Then we went to get some pipi and kutai. Next we went back to the car. My mum and my Dad cooked them up and we all got 1 can each of fanta. My Dad was the first to drink his can. Me and my sister carved them. My brother stayed at my Nana and Papa’s house. Next we went to the Lily Pond and we stayed there for 10 minutes. My sister went running in and when I got there I was running in too. Then my Mum came in. Then my Dad came in and my Dad put me on his shoulders and I jumped off. After that we went back up to the car and me and my sister had the rest of our mountain dew. My Mum had the rest of her Fanta then we went to the beach to go fishing. My Dad caught a king fish and my Mum caught a king fish. My Mum and Dad’s fish were long. Me and my sister got a snapper.Then we ate my sisters fish. I didn’t eat any because I don’t like fish I think It’s yucky. It’s only my Sister and brother and my Mum and Dad that like fish. I would never try fish.